Monday, June 9, 2014

The Artist


She pursed her lips and tried to control her breathing, rein in her emotions. Red paint was splattered everywhere.

"Did she now? Did she say that she loved you and whispered in your ear? Did she laugh at all your jokes too?"

  

41 comments:

  1. Ah, laughing at all of my jokes - that one hooks me every time. Ha!

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    1. Ha! It hooks me too...thanks for your comment!

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  2. Oh, few people can resist a person who loves and humors you.

    so much emotion in these colors and words.

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  3. Big story in few words--the red paint, I think, says it all.

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    1. Red says so much, eh? Thanks for your comment!

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  5. You, Patricia, are either a master of psychology or a brilliant observer. I had never thought about it before but... I don't think I could stay with someone who didn't laugh at, at least some of my jokes. Maybe groan at a few too.
    I like this. Well done.

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    1. ah! Thank you so much! I always loved studying psychology though I my paranoias kept me from really pursuing it. :-)

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  6. What a wonderful beginning of the story! Loved it.

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  7. Did she now? I can totally here to tone in that.

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  8. An amazing take on the prompt, and well put to words!

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  9. Loved your take on the prompt.
    A real mix of emotion, anger and heartache - all in just 42 words.

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  10. I liked this. I thought the provenance of the paint could have been clearer, but with 42 words, what can you do? :-)

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    1. 42, I still don't know how to feel about this number. Thank you!

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  11. BAM! Love the splattering of red paint! Can hear her imagining someone's blood : )

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  12. Great response to the ultimate question! A woman scorned, and armed with paint. Thanks for linking up!

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    1. just paint! Thank you so much for your comment and your work on a great writing community.

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  13. I like that you didn't just have dialogue- you let the visual set up the dialogue, then wrapped up the scene with all the background we'd need to get to the image.

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    1. Thank you for the thoughtful analysis.

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  14. Splattering red paint is always unsettling... but who can resist a person laughing at all your jokes.

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    1. ha! I know I can't. ;-) Thank you for your comment.

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  15. Ouch. That is one hurting woman. Lovely take on the prompt.

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    1. ha! we've all be there I'm sure. :-) Thank you for the comment.

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  16. So vividly painted! In more than one way! Lovely, Patricia.

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  17. The red paint invoked so much violence and anger. Really well 'painted.'

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  18. Such a short exchange, but so much told - I thought of having this conversation too.

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    1. Thank you for reading M.E. An idealized exchange when having this type of conversation. The reality is always much different.

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